Yesterday reviews - Part 2

Some more reviews I've received on GarageBand.com.

From Hilliard, Ohio -

Alrighty. These vocals remind me a lot of the Smashing pumpkins. However I don't think that nasally voice works for this soft music. The voice in this song is often painfully sharp, sorry, just vocals need some definite work. Guitars are really pretty. I don't know if this song is classified under prog rock however. It seems more like a folk song. Sounds like Bob Dylan, eh? That's more the style, however this does not sound anything like the prog rock kings like Rush, Yes, and ELP. I could see potential with this song. I do like the 12 string guitar in there, mixed in with a clean guitar. I just wish there was something to keep my attention more. I was starting to get bored after 4 minutes, especially with no drums really. So that's just something to think about. I think the melody of the song would be a lot better with some different vocals, but maybe this is a more lyrical song. That's the way Bob Dylan was. In conclusion, wrong genre, work on vocals, and make it more interesting.

This review repeats the general sentiments I've been getting - guitars sound great, vocals are week, wrong genre.

The reviewer's comment about gettng bored after four minutes without drums echo my thought that this song would not work as an instrumental.

At one time in the making of this song, I had envisioned a version that did have piano, drums, and a few strategically placed distortion guitar chords. However, I liked the way the acoustic guitars sounded so much that I never ended up putting in the additional layers.

From Riverton, Wyoming -

Nice fade in. Let's hope the song keeps building like that intro.

Your voaclist seems a little held back. Let it out man. Let your voice really belt out and sing out. You seem kind of naiasly. But I gotta say, the style is different and kind of intrigueing.

The lyrics are almost childish. But that's what makes me so interested in them. It would be interesting to know what you were thinking about when you wrote them. The words seem so fragile and hollow. It's great. Don't try to hard to be poetic though.

The melody is definitely different.

you sound like an old 60's disneys movie. It's very different and original. Good job.

Despite the repeated criticisms of the vocals, I am actually starting to feel encouraged from all these reviews. I imagine that if I improved the vocals and marketed this song in the appropriate genre it could actually sell.

From Horn Lake, Mississippi

the melody has a good feeling to it.the lyrics have a fairly good story behind it.the guitarist plays very well with the chording of the song.

Thanks for the feel-good review!